My first mobile LP for comments (3)
Hi all,
i did my first mobile landing page.
For sharing & open for comments, please.
http://f4rag.voluumtrk.com/bad4deb5-04e0-4281-ab5c-3ee6e33e07e3?pln={pln}&plid={plid}&crid={crid}&isp ={isp}&uid={uid_deviceid}&country={country}&brand= {device_vendor}&model={device_model}&os={os}&cid={ clickid}
Thank you!
Very nice for a first attempt! 
Here are some suggestions you can test:
1)Shorter headline in a larger font to make it stand out. Can play with colors (e.g. red or blue to make it stand out).
2)There are a million guides on how to write a good headline, but the one that immediately comes to mind are questions like:
"Feeling peckish?"
"Craving for food?"
"Got the munchies?"
You get the idea. 
You could even follow that up with something like:
"Don't feel like going out?"
"Too tired to cook?"
Or even make combinations such as "Craving for food but too tired to cook?"
3)No need to repeat the same thing twice. Right now you have "UberEATS gets you the food you want" and "faster than anyone else" twice.
4)Sometimes step-by-step instructions can work quite well, so try:
Step 1) Install the app
Step 2) Order what you're craving
Step 3) Enjoy your food!
Or even 2 steps:
Step 1) Install the app
Step 2) Choose your favorite foods to have them delivered!
5)I'm viewing your lander from my smartphone and the "1. 2. 3." are right on the edge of the lander - adding a margin would be nice.
6)Definitely make the call-to-action larger - a LOT larger! You want it to be attention-grabbing, plus easily "tappable" by the finger. A little link can be difficult to tap. Can split-test just the link with a big button with the link on it. You can split-test the CTA text as well. Usually, stating a benefit will make it more effective - e.g. "Get Food Now!"
7)A larger body font would make the words easier to read.
Good luck with testing!
Amy
Amy, thanks for the comments. I greatly appreciate it
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